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Sep 16, 2011
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Seepage - Final writing with emotion poem
Makes me want to rip heads off.
Bullshit, verbal leakage
you are putrid seepage,
dripping down my brain.
Glacial sweat creeping down the back of my neck
trickling through my senses
feel the need to massacre ,
as I am , lying in this metaphorical gutter.
Tiny bites nip at my
self control. Testing my durability .
Laying me low.
The crux of it all.
Your are woven into every fibre.
Being without you devastating ,
Evaporating , driving me insane.
Lost amongst the fag butts and the debauchery
wallowing in my melancholy.
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Candlewitch
13 years 9 months ago
Dear Lou,
Most excellent work! Much better than mine, you silly girl! (and yours makes sense, too!)
always, Cat
lou
13 years 9 months ago
Cat
thank you.
Aww don't tell me off , (bottom lip quiver) LOL!!
Lou
raj
13 years 9 months ago
Lou..
gut wrenching sensations emit out of your poem i believe just the way you wished to emote ....well done ..it is very effective...
lou
13 years 9 months ago
Chyrs
You are welcome
Your workshops are always well planned and fun.
Lou
lou
13 years 9 months ago
LOL!!
"You wouldn't like me when i'm angry ," as 'The Hulk,' would say LMAO!!
Lou