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Jan 13, 2023
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Self Examination
We, like mushrooms of the
Field, develop strong fiber
With the light of dawn
Fortified by hopeful rays
Of the new day’s sun
Staunch enough to endure
The biting of teeth chewing
At its tender stem
Yet too fragile to bear
The weight of night’s awesome
Boot.
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Jackweb
2 years 6 months ago
Wow!
Nothing more to say than to give kudos to this awesome piece. Woven with creative beauty. Your profound imagery heightened the energy of the poem. I really like the brevity.
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Clentin
2 years 6 months ago
Thank you for your comment,
Thank you for your comment, greatly appreciated.
Any and all comments are welcome.
Still trying to write after a good many years
Clentin
2 years 6 months ago
Thank you for your comment,
Thank you for your comment, greatly appreciated.
Any and all comments are welcome.
Still trying to write after a good many years
Lavender
2 years 6 months ago
Self Examination
Hello, Clentin,
A lovely simile. I can follow it closely all the way until the final intriguing line. What is the weight of night's awesome boot?
Thank you,
L