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Apr 27, 2021
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Servant Of The Kill (by: eddy styx) revised
Servant Of The Kill
coming into
the sultry season,
I've lost my way
but not my reason.
now a man
of middle age
who has controlled
his primal rage.
I used to kill them
all too quickly,
painting walls of blood
with broad strokes, thickly.
I stalk the night
patiently, ever
shadow-obscured
I shall forget them, never...
their faces burned into my brain
and more than this
their screams of pain
this, to me is perfect bliss...
a Servant Of The kill,
my only name!
* by: eddy styx who is my MALE, murderous, malevolent alter ego who writes dark poetry. (fantasy)
About This Poem
Last Few Words: poem by: eddy styx, my alter ego. why not develop an alter ego of your own?
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
scribbler
4 years 2 months ago
Eddy
COULD be a woman's name. Short for Edna lol. This is as dark as eddy ever gets. Well done. BTW please tell eddy that there are a few politicians I'd like him to meet lol
Candlewitch
4 years 2 months ago
hello Stan,
the name "eddy styx is kind of a play on words, lol... eddy, as in a small whirl in the flow of water, and styx as in the river Styx. thanks for reading and commenting . I really appreciate it.
always. eddy
*ever, Cat
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