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Jan 27, 2023
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Seven
Arise to clarity this morning.
Long removed from throbbing dawns.
Queasy breakfasts dripping with exhaustion.
Daily obligations to the liquor store.
Free from the stale remnants collecting on the countertop.
Aligned with loving purpose.
Trying every day.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: January 26th is my 7 year “sober” date from alcohol which was a daily haunt for 20 years. Mostly strong beer, sometimes scotch. I owe it all to my wife who did a very brave thing and asked if I could slow down. I can’t. I can quit. So I did. I’m kinda all in or I’m out. 7 years 7 lines Tim
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Geezer
2 years 5 months ago
Absolutely amazing...
I admire your honesty in the admission of being "all in or out". I am somewhat like that. I still struggle with things. Congratulations on your seven years! This is a story that deserves telling and you have done so, in an amazing fashion. Crisp, clear images with little extra, to complete the feeling that this is a struggle that is largely over. ~ Geez.
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Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 5 months ago
Thank you
Yeah I do things all the way. I’m just now starting to be able to control my thinking. Nothing is as stone cold sober as getting triggered, realizing why and what behaviors that causes, and then side stepping those behaviors. That’s what my new goal has been and I consider it a kind of sobriety of the mind. Writing sure does help.
Tim
RoseBlack
2 years 5 months ago
Congratulations
On seven years! Your honesty and dedication to your commitment is inspirational. Well done on the poem and well done on sobriety!!
Seren
2 years 5 months ago
Dear Tim
I loved to have a bourbon or two once upon a time I never really had a problem drinking. It was my body (diabetes) that didn't take well to the morning after. So I haven't had a drink since 2011, I miss it every now and then but I don't miss feeling like death warmed up.
7yrs is a huge achievement, congratulations and I am sure your wife only adores you even more for doing such a loving thing for her she's a lucky woman.
I'd lose the caps on every line unless the first 4 are an acronym? Because the last 3 spell FAT?
Love Jayne
Words.unwritten
2 years 5 months ago
Wow ...7 years ...you should
Wow ...7 years ...you should be so very proud x x
Amazing achievement and lovely words to signify ...I'm proud of you x x
Lavender
2 years 5 months ago
Seven
Congratulations, Tim. I'm so very happy for you. You are the best.
L
Rula
2 years 5 months ago
Applaud
Your achievement Tim and your words of celebration!
Good job on every level indeed!
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 5 months ago
Thank you
For all your kind words. For the love I always feel here. For your inspiration. For your humanity. For all your beautiful faults, perceived or otherwise. You are dear to me.
Tim
Candlewitch
2 years 5 months ago
hey Tim,
you are a wonder...Your wife is an amazing woman! Congratulations on your seven lines and seven years. I have borderline diabetes and have to watch my sugars. sometimes hard to do as I don't like being controlled by anyone or anything! be proud of your seven years and treasure them!
*love, Cat
*ever, eddy
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 5 months ago
Mark
Thanks for commenting,
Tim
Candlewitch
2 years 5 months ago
dear Tim,
did I say congratulations to you? I;m so proud of you! Steve too!
*love & hugs, Cat