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Dystopia
Dystopia
Jan 02, 2023 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
This poem is part of the contest:

Neopoem Of The Week January 1st 2023 to January 7th 2023

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Shattered

Thoughts rain down,
To my ears, not a sound,
Some lingering,
Some barely ringing,

Nothing around matters,
A spark and the glass shatters,
A wall that occluded,
Imagined danger eluded,

A barrier no more,
An open door,
To a world so free,
Only needed is a key,

To put away one that glows,
Rise you will, from the lowest of lows.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Country/Region: Canada

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Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 5 months ago

We build up walls

We do this for survival. Survival mode is exhausting and eventually the walls must be broken down. This is painful as it requires a person to take a really hard honest look at themselves. It’s time to live now not merely survive.

The poem is great in meter and rhyme. Loosely structured like a sonnet but not really.

Thanks for sharing,
Tim

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 years 5 months ago

*smiles :)

a unique poem that freely flows in words and meaning! I like it very much!

*hugs, Cat

Rula

Rula

2 years 5 months ago

Love the ending

the last line works so well for me, and a good message too.
Thank you for sharing.
Best wishes