scribbler

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SHEPHERD

When storms wrack me in my life
you bring back gentle breeze.
When cold acts cut me like a knife
we walk to set my soul at ease.

During times of pain and doubt
I feel you right here at my side.
As my journey takes me all about
like earth, I know you will abide.

The church where I prefer to go,
hand made by time and sun and rain,
Mere chemistry won't make it grow
or let it heal a tired man's pain.

You guide me down the trails I take
and let me know when, oft, I stray.
When hot sun seems to nearly bake
you slake my thirst at end of day.

Let others say you are not there.
Blind eyes will never care to see
that you are nearly everywhere
but mostly here inside of me.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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Comments

Frenchf

12 years 3 months ago

I just love your works

Of love and the thoughts you express about your loved one

This is the best line
that you are nearly everywhere
but mostly here inside of me.

Frenchf

12 years 3 months ago

I just love your works

Of love and the thoughts you express about your loved one

This is the best line
that you are nearly everywhere
but mostly here inside of me.

scribbler

12 years 3 months ago

Hi french

Thank you. Sometimes finding a good end to a poem is tough but this ending pretty much wrote itself. Appreciate the visit...............stan

Seren

12 years 3 months ago

Beautiful poem Stan

it left me with a deep sense of peace

lovely lovely write

I cant see anything I would change or alter

love Jayne-Chloe x

scribbler

12 years 3 months ago

Hi Jayne

Everybody needs an anchor in their life. For some it's religion, for others it can be a loved one. I am lucky to have both....................stan

Seren

12 years 3 months ago

We are both blessed to have

We are both blessed to have both :)

love Jayne-Chloe x

Ian.T

12 years 3 months ago

Stan

Your God, your Love, that you have both and that they walk with you is reflected in all your words, and the ways you perceive things, Go well my friend the world will never harm you, as you hold the universe, Yours Ian.T

loved

12 years 3 months ago

you are unique in your own way

and I of my own
twain shall never meet

universe and eternity may

Stan yet from loving your poetry
I can't stay away..

you too do read me
once in a wild odd way!

scribbler

12 years 3 months ago

Hi Ian

I know of people who have neither and can't understand how they get through their days. Appreciate the visit........stan

scribbler

12 years 3 months ago

Hi loved

Thank you. I read most things posted here but there are not enough hours in the day to comment on all I read lol. I'm pleased you found time to comment on this little scribble.................stan

loved

12 years 3 months ago

I now spend more time reading you ...than composing

as this site sliced me
ten poems i could compose
at the drop of a hat
only one was worthy
and as Jess would have said
a gem
in slush!

scribbler

12 years 3 months ago

hi

We should All spend more time reading and less writing . But you should spend it reading others than this old scribbler lol.................stan

loved

12 years 3 months ago

i read all those who are

equally generous towards my free verse
and you are

Josephus

12 years 3 months ago

A pleasure and a meditation

As you I find strength and solace in God. I envy the strength and intimacy of your relationship with your wife. You have expressed those values in ways I could never have. I value your God given talent.

There is a bit of Frost in you!

Joe