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Michael Anthony
Michael Anthony
Aug 08, 2025 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Shimmer and Sway

I asked her to dance
even though I barely knew how.

It was a garden party.
I worried I'd look the fool.

The stars blinked some,
but didn't laugh,
and neither did she.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: San Francisco Bay Area - USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Bukowski, Billy Collins, Ted Kooser, Haiku & Harvey Kurtzman (a visual poet, of sorts)

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Geezer

Geezer

1 month 3 weeks ago

I guess...

we all have had the problem of the first dance; some of us faced that fear, and we managed to stand up and sway around the floor with her in our arms and not fall down; the rest never learned to dance.

This is a great story told with very few words, yet so descriptive. ~ Geez.

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Alex Tanner

Alex Tanner

1 month 3 weeks ago

Hello Michael

Simple but effective, I reckon all us blokes been there at sometime. Alex