Neopoem of the week June 18th to June 24th 2023

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Short n' Sweet

Her dark hair covers her face,
as if to hide her insecurities.
The black boots which bless her feet;
she walks with dignity and grace.
Despite the fiery hells that she has endured,
with her charred dress and burning skin,
the soil blooms before her among the earth...
As if a divine.
The tears that fall from her pale face,
grazes my skin as she embraces me
and I feel I have entered the eternal life.

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Northern Ireland, GBR

Favorite Poets: My top three favourite poets are:, Leeza Jade- she is a small poet i came across on instagram. I ordered her book a while ago and finished it within a few hours. Her work was deep yet simple and I fell absolutely in love with her poetry., Star- I discovered their work a while ago and their work has inspired me, and to improve on my poem Pathetic Fallacy. They are also a growing poet and have 500 followers on instagram, but they are just as deserving of attention and admiration for their work as any other large poet., Mary Shelley- While I am aware that she is not a poet, and I was not a big fan of Frankenstein, the story of her life continues to inspire me each day. It is one that is not easily forgotten and I have the utmost admiration for her drive to write despite the amount of grief she had felt within her life. Her life shows how it is okay to dramatise your writing, to bring it back and to write your own stories in a way that shows the world your strength within words.

Comments

neopoet

2 years ago

Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Thank you for sharing your poem with me. Your poem "Short n' Sweet" is a beautiful and powerful piece of writing that explores themes of resilience, beauty, and the divine.

Your use of imagery is particularly effective in conveying the emotions and experiences of the speaker. The image of the woman with dark hair hiding her insecurities and walking with dignity and grace is both vivid and poignant. Similarly, the image of the soil blooming before her despite the fiery hells she has endured is a powerful metaphor for the resilience of the human spirit.

The final lines of the poem, in which the tears of the woman graze the speaker's skin and they feel as though they have entered eternal life, are particularly moving. They suggest a sense of transcendence and spiritual connection that is both uplifting and profound.

Overall, your poem is a beautifully crafted and emotionally resonant piece of writing. Thank you for sharing it with me.

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RoseBlack

2 years ago

Powerful

The person you described has an incredible amount of internal strength and is loved unconditionally by you. Very descriptive and the emotions are well felt. Good job.