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lonlyhrtsclub13
lonlyhrtsclub13
Mar 10, 2018 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Short Verse

Rebel child
Something wild
Hard to forget

Failure to comply
Wrong in his eye
Stupid little bitch

Can’t you change
Isn’t it strange
Left behind

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: New York, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, Jim Morrison, Rudyard Kipling, Hermann Hesse, Henry Wadsworth Longfellow, Jack London, Stephen King, there are many more....

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trekker

7 years 7 months ago

Short verse

I love the directness and straight to the point of this poem. Reminds me of my childhood and the young women who must have had those same thoughts. Well done. I would not change a thing.

Sincerely, trekker

lonlyhrtsclub13

lonlyhrtsclub13

7 years 7 months ago

Thank you

I like short verse...quick and to the point...

Rula

Rula

7 years 7 months ago

Carrie

Not sure, but I thought the third line in verse 1 better reads as( hard to forget ) as it is related to kind of bad childhood experience. I am sure I've missed something behind the curtains.
Anyways I liked your short verse.

Geezer

Geezer

7 years 7 months ago

I get...

what you are saying, but you have to know how to read the rest of the poem to make sense of the "easy to forget". Good poem though. In light of knowing the situation, you could still use the 'hard to forget". He is persistent! ~ Gee.
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lonlyhrtsclub13

lonlyhrtsclub13

7 years 7 months ago

Revision made

Definitely sounds better. And yes he is..just for the wrong reasons