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Triskelion
Triskelion
Jan 18, 2025 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

SHOT DOWN!?

theres a Georgia-based laser in place
knocking rocketships down outa space
such precision in aim
might a blonde be to blame?
kinda strange on its face kinda case

About This Poem

Last Few Words: ...on a limerick kick...need to turn the news off.. Thanks for reading

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Lake Simcoe Canada

Favorite Poets: Poe, Frost, E.B. Browning, Theodor Seuss Geisel,

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Triskelion

Triskelion

6 months ago

Hey, Ruby..

...that's a little tough for my interest, but I can offer this one. Hope you like it as well

Your question is good, but its loaded
some others might claim it exploded
ITS NO STARSHIP TO MARS
'CUZ IT "FLIES INTO STARS"!!
its a far fetch of flight its promoted

I assume they need to make a joke about the failure so people don't see a billion meals turned into a light show.

Thanks for reading and your comment, Ruby!

Thomas

Triskelion

Triskelion

6 months ago

for Ruby

Making (f) light

it wasn't a flop or a crash
or a big flush of everyones cash
it was flying chop suey
or it just went kablooey
a hoo-ee, a humdinger bash

...can't seem to let this go...cheers Ruby!

Ruby Lord

Ruby Lord

6 months ago

I know what you mean Thomas.

I know what you mean Thomas.

Musk’s rocket took off with a snore,
his flight fell to shite on the floor.
With a boom and a bash,
in a fiery ash
the rapid event he’ll ignore.

Yours has a much better and valid reference to the cost of his shit. Ruby xx

Triskelion

Triskelion

6 months ago

Here's another

his rocket was spluttering farts
in a rapid dismantling of parts
as it blew into chaff
he eschewed with a laugh
that was half bad, but wow, whatta start

Thomas

Triskelion

Triskelion

6 months ago

...another?

..just tell me to stop...

I thought about going to Mars
on a ship made to fly in the stars
but I'd rather a barge
if elons in charge
but if marj is id rather his cars

Thomas

Ruby Lord

Ruby Lord

6 months ago

His rocket ignited with flair

His rocket ignited with flair
a marvel to leap through the air
But its rapid unplanned
left a crater unmanned
space travel’s no game, lets be fair

Triskelion

Triskelion

5 months 4 weeks ago

...ohh, dang

..that made me laugh... So glad to see someone writing limericks. The sillier, the better..
Thank you Ruby!

Thomas

Ruby Lord

Ruby Lord

5 months 4 weeks ago

Thank you Thomas, last one.

Thank you Thomas, last one.

There once was a rocket so grand
aimed for the stars, badly planned
mid-flight, oh my dear
It blew up, as I hear
disassembly, became a demand.

Lavender

Lavender

6 months ago

Shot Down?!

Hello, Thomas,
A well-done limerick and theme! I hate to think of how often these trials will happen, and at what cost. Aah, well... progress.
Thank you!
L

Triskelion

Triskelion

6 months ago

Hi Lavender!

I think the problem is the computerized pilot. Maybe quacktain careless should take over the stick on the next flight. He can take his buddies up with him too.

Thanks for enjoying, Lavender!

Thomas

Triskelion

Triskelion

6 months ago

Haha...

..I always think about that video medley with all the crazy flight contraptions when I see these failures. Thanks again.

Thomas