Silence

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

Consider exploring the contrast between sound and silence more deeply to enhance the emotional resonance of the poem. The repetition of "loudly when we did" effectively emphasizes intensity, but the shift to silence in the final lines could benefit from additional imagery or sensory detail to clarify the significance of this transition. Additionally, the phrase "somber note" is somewhat general; specifying or elaborating on this detail could strengthen the poem's impact and provide readers with a clearer understanding of the event or emotion that led to silence.

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this poem is short but succinct, I love it!

always, Cat

Absolutely simple but so expressive. I like how you built this from the very beginning to the last line.

In the last few lines, Iwould use "A" day instead of "The" day
with somber note, but that's only me.
Much enjoyed the read.
Thank you for sharing.