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Aug 22, 2024
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SILENCED! – a deadly cycle
Ssshhh! they hissed…Keep quiet!
But why? I asked
Only to be frowned upon.
Do as you are told! Don’t talk back
But I want…
Shut up!
You’re cut off!
To your own little world, you retreat
Confused over the matter
Buts and Whys flood your mind
Tears triggered to trickle down from incorruptibility
Heart pierced by double edged swords
Scarred and ruined for life
Shutting down is what you decide
Speak up! They yelled.
I can’t hear you, you hypocrite!
Are you dumb?
But they be knocking on iron doors
Ignorant
As to who locked it up
They are clueless and cruel-est
You are buried with questions
Why now? you wonder
Feeling like an unconnected tv remote control
Stuttering and Mumbling
Is all they get from you
Confidence was murdered long time ago
You have no will to go on
Now as an adult, you turn around
To mirror the person ahead
To a young person you once were
Taking no thought
Of how a numbskull you are
Shame on you!
Will the cycle ever end?
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
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Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
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10 months 1 week ago
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Candlewitch
10 months 1 week ago
Hello Pou,
I see you are new here. Welcome to Neopoet, it is very nice to meet you! The answer to your question at the end of your poem is Yes! The cycle can be broken! I know, because I broke it many years ago. I cut all that ugly out of my life and you can, too! I very much liked this poem because I can relate to it so well. my favorite lines are:
Speak up! They yelled.
I can’t hear you, you hypocrite!
Are you dumb?
But they be knocking on iron doors
Ignorant
As to who locked it up
They are clueless and cruel-est
*hugs, Cat