49reasons

Apr 27, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

a silent muse

I searched my pockets
for the words lost
somewhere between lint
and forgotten hopes

I searched the shores
watched the waves crash
loudly against the grains
as they pulled each vowel
into the open sea

I searched a sky
no longer filled with stars
just a moon imprinted
with a wordless face

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Melbourne, Australia, AUS

Favorite Poets: Pablo Neruda, Charles Bukowski, Anne Waldman

Comments

magics02

14 years 2 months ago

Wow

I really feel this write and must come back for second read.. Amazing it is.. this part I felt so strongly

I searched the shores
watched the waves crash
loudly against the grains
as they pulled each vowel
into the open sea

awesome metaphors used and nice to meet you. I do not know if we ever met before. My name is Magics but real name is Mona. Hope to read more of you...this poem hit me and I so liked it much..

49reasons

14 years 2 months ago

how strange that I should be reading a piece by you while you read one of mine. I don't think we have met but it is lovely to meet you.
These words have been rattling around in my mind for ages but tonight I finally sat and finished getting it down.

thank you for reading and I'm glad you liked it

magics02

14 years 2 months ago

Hello Juls

Nice to meet you also and no it is not strange it is the spirit working in the interactions as you read my piece and I read yours. I want to revisit this one again for there is a powerful message contained in it and of it.

Blessings of love
Ms Mona

CCfire

14 years 2 months ago

The moon has many phases, you

The moon has many phases, you are having a bad one but it will pass my bestie, it will pass xx

49reasons

14 years 2 months ago

Chez

I know, there is hope for better things x

49reasons

14 years 2 months ago

Chrys

Thanks for reading and for your comment

Nordic cloud

14 years 2 months ago

Well put this poem 49ner

The draw of the sea, the draw of the moon, I have just experienced trying to get out of the sea up a beach of moving little stones the suck of the waves drawing me back into the water, I see each stone a vowel, a word, and they are dawn into the depths of the dark ocean where they are so difficult to read.

Well put this poem 49ner, yours Ann of Norway

49reasons

14 years 2 months ago

Ann of Norway

I do enjoy knowing what my pieces invoke in others. Thank you for reading & your comment.

49reasons

14 years 2 months ago

Lonnie

Thank you very much

Eduardo Cruz

14 years 2 months ago

Juls

Now your truly writing beatiful. your expressions are so clear in your acrobatic mastery of your words.
The fear is gone of your first days
I am so happy to have the chance to write these beautiful words, I can see the pain but also the hope of better days.
Eddie C.

49reasons

14 years 2 months ago

Eddie

I'm starting to feel alot more comfortable around here.
You know, there has to be hope otherwise we wallow in a mire of depression.
Thanks for reading & commenting
.

49reasons

14 years 2 months ago

Ian

I love to collect useless information. You never know when you might need to use it
thanks for reading