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SINS of the FLESH

I so love your skin's feel
beneath my old rough fingers
e'en after a caress I steal
the memory still lingers

As touch moves on to gentle cleft
I'm filled with anticipation
of patience I am now bereft
please fill my expectation

And as each little roundish nub
also begs for attention
calling out for a light rub
and a poem's lyric mention

Just the sight of your soft curves
fills me with such delight
and never ever fails to serve
to enrich my appetite

The taste of you upon my lips
is beyond most others' reaches
and now my secret finally slips
I sure love eating peaches

Another oldie from old site...........scribbler

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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Comments

scribbler

14 years 5 months ago

sins

thanks for coming by and leaving an optional version. i am always editing my stuff and will keep your ideas in mind when I edit this................scribbler

scribbler

14 years 5 months ago

sins

the only cereal I kill is a bowl of corn flakes lol.I'm glad you liked this.............stan

Kailashana2

14 years 5 months ago

You'll go to hell for this!

;-)

scribbler

14 years 5 months ago

What ????

For writing about fruit? lmao...........................stan

loved

14 years 5 months ago

i steal many a heart

you many a soul
and keep most of us guessing
what's coming up next?

scribbler

14 years 5 months ago

hi

Beware scribbler Stealer of souls lol. thanks for coming by................scribbler

loved

14 years 5 months ago

Hi

once in a way
i come by
at other times
I'm shy

scribbler

14 years 5 months ago

hello Jayne

I'm going to post some stuff from old site on occasion, so you'll see familiar writes once in a while. Think I will delete comma...........stan

raj

14 years 5 months ago

Dear Stan

for me this was a virgin read and having read this one..i can safely say that this one is from a thorough bred romantic ....cleverly written...titillating the mind without being gross....

scribbler

14 years 5 months ago

sins

There is a lot of difference between erotic and pornographic. I'm glad you like this..................stan

lou

14 years 5 months ago

Fruity

another peach

lou

scribbler

14 years 5 months ago

hello lou

thank you.............stan

mark

1 year 2 months ago

You Fresh Fruit Cake LMAO

Remove the last line reference you silly. Fools like me don't need to know. Do you really believe the sense words belong in a poem because there are two schools of thought on that. One is yes and one is no. I myself like the challenge of showing the senses but with rhyme and meter it is quite a challenge.
Loved this work,
Mark