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May 18, 2022 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

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Sister's Monster (by: eddy styx and Cat)

Sister's Monster
(eddy styx and Cat)

come!
you must...
hide behind me
in the jungle of
this so-called thing
the human race.
come!
in time, in step, in pace
I will shield you
with my cape!
stay in my shadow
no one will know
and never again
will you suffer
rape.
or
the indignation
of accusations
of telling lies!
allow me
to take over
I will punish that bitch
SISTER and,
her abusive man
whom she protects...
all of their ilk
will die
a million deaths!

About This Poem

Last Few Words: I could use some help on the title. and any rough spots. thanks, eddy styx and Cat

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda, Jim Morrison, the whole of Neopoet and many more.

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Comments

3 years 1 month ago

Rage, rage, rage

Wat a commentary!

Remind not to get you mad at me….

3 years 1 month ago

hello Ray,

thank you for reading.

ever, eddy & Cat

3 years 1 month ago

dear Mark,

I would be glad to answer any of your questions, if you would only phrase them properly. Can you do that for me?

ever, eddy & Cat

p.s.
me oh my
I'm not looking for any sympathy, just telling a story

3 years 1 month ago

Sis,

eddy may well protect you but you also have a Brother across the waters that will also protect you.

Enjoying you vent your rage & anger...very eddy!!

regards

One (Brother)

3 years 1 month ago

dearest One,

I feel your love from so far away, it brings us closer as my love for you is just as strong! I know your protection and it warms me
Love, Sis

we are brothers in arms and comrades always!
ever, eddy

3 years 1 month ago

Cheers for eddy...

I see his protection and his rage. ~ Geez.
.

3 years 1 month ago

dear Geez,

I thank you for reading and understanding. I feel sad that Mark mocked me in his comment. your comment has helped me feel better.

ever, eddy
*hugs, Cat