Skeletal

Skeletal fingers
Clench around my emptiness
Forcing death’s embrace

My wretched life source
Diminishes in seconds
Exterminated

No life soul released
Existence as a lone ghost
In Purgatory

So, Heaven or Hell
Confess my sins or stay lost
Gates of Hell, open!

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft

About the Author

Region, Country: West England, GBR

Favorite Poets: Sylvia Plath (poet), Caitlin Mattison/Eddy Styx (poet 'candlewitch'), Enda Collins (poet 'ziggy'), Martin Gore (lyricist for Depeche Mode), Neil Tennant (lyricist for Pet Shop Boys), Stefan Großmann (lyricist for Absurd Minds), Lemmy Kilmister (lyricist for Motörhead), Nathan Reiner (lyricist for Third Realm), Wayne Hussey (lyricist for The Mission), Leonard Cohen (lyricist), Tom Shear (lyricist for Assemblage 23), Clint Carney (lyricist for System Syn & Fake), Ronan Harris (lyricist for VNV Nation), Aaron Lewis (lyricist for Staind), Jason Charles Miller (lyricist for Godhead), Torben Wendt (lyricist for Diorama), Adrian Hates (lyricist for Diary Of Dreams)

Comments

raj

14 years ago

Dan

this is quite unlike you to write a short poem in three line verses but very effective...

Hooded Stranger

14 years ago

Raj

Raj,

as I wrote it, I soon realised by accident that they were almost haiku's, so I touched them up and made them into haiku's. I then wrote a lyric based on these verses. I decided to post these rather than the lyrics...for a change.

I may post the lyric at a later date.

Thanks for dropping by my friend,

regards,

lou

14 years ago

Dan

I like the short punchy verses, clear,concise and effective. In my view near perfect.

Lou

Hooded Stranger

14 years ago

Lou

Lou,

I always intended these to be short and hopefully punchy, but not haiku's...but I am pleased with the result now.

Thanks,

raj

14 years ago

nice to see your departure

nice to see your departure from your preferred style...these are not only well constructed Haikus but they establish a good connection from one verse to the next...

Hooded Stranger

14 years ago