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Nov 29, 2011
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THE SMELL OF DEAD RACCOON--an edit + change in second stanza
THE SMELL OF DEAD RACCOON
Down a two-lane highway
one midnight near Macon, Georgia
an eighteen-wheeler came barreling through
like a bullet on a target straight and true.
the air was heavy with the smell
of dead raccoon.
warning to all woodland creatures
Death was speeding in their direction.
a deer at a crossing
heeding no warning
was found the next morning
wheel marks across his middle
and as most animals do
smelled a little like dead raccoon too.
innocence sees the moment only.
ignorance sees what it wants to see
funny how many humans
end up smelling like dead raccoon
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
weirdelf
13 years 7 months ago
You tickled me here as you seldom do,
you're normally so un-relievedly serious and even morbid, though who could blame you?
This is wryly, morbidly funny, with a potent message tacked on. Good job.
vs3 line6
smelled a littlre like dead raccoon too. [little]
Geremia
13 years 7 months ago
Thanks, buddy. I still do
Thanks, buddy. I still do have a sense of humor :)
Joe
Rhiannon1010
13 years 7 months ago
I love it
This is the best type of humor, if i do say so myself.
Geremia
13 years 7 months ago
Thanks. Quite a compliment/
Thanks. Quite a compliment/