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Mar 13, 2018
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To smile or cry
In our life
There are days of smiles and cry's
The days are shorten as the laughter
Seems to die.
We desperately hold on too the laughter
Because to laugh gives us a choice weather we live or die
Yes the days are shorter ! of smiles and cry's
But the remembrance of the laughing will be the smile that I cry
— Trouble, Mar 13, 2018
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Style/Type: Free verse
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Trouble
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