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Aug 08, 2022
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Smilling posters
Crazy baboons
Confused yet not bothered,
Smilling and still paddling us back to yesterday,
Visionless fools with swollen stomach
of the nations fortune,
Termites I call them.
Beasts in human form
With no repentance,
Smilling faces on posters
Devilish minds
The cloud is gathering again.
Wise up, wise up now,
Better starve now
And not fall a victim to thier corn & cassava
Better starve and work
And stand for a better future
Fight, brother fight.
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Comments
Jackweb
2 years 10 months ago
Hello Chiori!
I love the way you personified your title. The use of metaphor also added texture to the poem. It conveyed a vivid imagery which transcends the literal meaning of the words.
The poem: This is a full blow of words against the contemporary politicians. You're directly targeting your insult punch on Nigerian - greedy politician who have woefully failed in delivering a good governance to the masses.
As 2023 election is forth coming, all of them are now appearing on posters, televisions, newspapers yet, they continue making empty promises of things they can't even fulfill. We're watching them closely.
Well done!
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Chiori
2 years 10 months ago
Exactly
Exactly