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Jan 11, 2015
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The Smitten Editor
my adjectives caressed her nouns
my adverbs followed her actions closely
and with a keen sense of direction,
my prepositions tracked and guided
her every placement and position
but, by her lackadaisical use of punctuation
I misread her meaning completely
now I am just another unreferenced pronoun
replaced by him , a dangling clause
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
judyanne
10 years 6 months ago
very clever al
I really like the way your mind works
Love judy
xxx
emogothgirl
10 years 6 months ago
THIS IS TOO CLEVER.
there are many things I would say about this including "why did I not come up with this," "oh you clever dog you," and other things, but I will stick with I absolutely love this poem. it made my day, wonderful job my friend.
mag
Arrow
10 years 6 months ago
Great!
And if it rhymed . . . ooohh, I can't stand the thought!