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Oct 25, 2023
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SO CALLED
So called world
Yell not a word
In favour of the oppressed
In hunger and death dressed
So called champions
The big democracies
Do not help the right
But back up the wrong
Help the usurpers to snatch
The land the house
The women that match
About This Poem
Last Few Words: To the oppressed of the world
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
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neopoet
1 year 8 months ago
Neopoet AI 5-29-23 version
The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:
Title: SO CALLED
Review:
The poem "SO CALLED" highlights the hypocrisy and indifference of the so-called champions and big democracies towards the oppressed. The poet uses concise and straightforward language to convey their message effectively. However, there are a few areas where the poem could benefit from further development and refinement.
Firstly, the poem could benefit from more vivid and specific imagery to enhance the emotional impact. By incorporating sensory details and concrete descriptions, the reader can better connect with the experiences of the oppressed. This will help to create a stronger emotional response and make the poem more memorable.
Additionally, the poem could benefit from a clearer structure or progression of ideas. Consider organizing the poem into stanzas or sections to create a sense of rhythm and flow. This will help guide the reader through the poem and allow for a more cohesive exploration of the theme.
Furthermore, the poem could benefit from expanding on the idea of "the land, the house, the women that match." By providing more
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