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Jun 25, 2022
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So it Goes
Kurt Vonnegut shined
his radiance in dark wit
hapless twists of fate
To see human kind
with journalistic reproach
and stark opacity
Entombed within the
curled cover of paperback
lie secrets in wait
Depictions once typed
through smoke and whiskey’s thick haze
a burning city
You were there of course
as a prisoner of war
in your slaughter house
In make shift barracks
subterranean chamber
A death factory
Withstood fire bombs
but compelled to excavate
the carnage and slag
Eastern allies break
your bondage to attrition
forced onto your soul
You then return home
try to tell your sad story
to all of the world
It takes many years
to process all you have seen
so much errant death
What else to do but
joke about, and smile and laugh
I quote; So it goes
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Challenge accepted. Hopefully I delivered the goods.
Style/Type: Structured: Eastern
Review Request Direction:
What did you think of my title?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
Is the internal logic consistent?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
3 years ago
Indeed...
I was struck dumb, at your choice of Vonnegut and his writings. [Not an easy task, striking me dumb]. Indeed, your knowledge of his trials and aberrant sense of humor, show you to be a prolific reader, with extremely good taste! To be a true Sci-Fi buff, you must read Kurt Vonnegut. I enjoyed this much! BTW, it should be [shone], not [shined]. ~ Geezer.
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Jackweb
3 years ago
P. O. W.
The poem has dark undertone which often goes unnoticed if not read carefully.
Excellent piece!