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Soaring

Tommy was a rollin’ stone
way before he had a phone
in his pocket
Ports in storms
given or taken
Crime and grace
vary from face to face
Such is the case
from place to place
Can’t outrace the sun
Fun and pain
Soulful refrain
Train keeps a rollin’
Rails tied
To the earth,
Sea, and sky
Watch me fly -
My Barco lounger
Is not intimidated
By the farthest reaches
Beaches and bingo parlors
Diamond mine oppression,
Poverty of wealth
Confessions
Making the best of
The little you have,
gives birth to
tough as nails hearts
and
Fun and pain
Soulful refrain
Grains of revolution
Piled high
One tiny bit
Builds into
Serious geology.
Geology
All the worlds a stage
On which
Endless
Fun and pain and
Soulful refrains
Play out.
Bytes of bites
Now fly about—
Watch out
For the mountainside
Brothers and sisters

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Made some suggested edits. It wasn't that bad:)

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: SC

Favorite Poets: What Was Once the Largest Shopping Center in Northern Ohio Was Built Where There Had Been a Pond I Used to Visit Every Summer Afternoon by Mary Oliver. , Chapter Subtitle in Hardcore Zen by Brad Warner Chapter Title: If Only... Subtitle: you may find that having is not so pleasing as wanting. This is not logical but it is often true., Rumi: Tending Two Shops

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Geezer

Geezer

5 years 3 months ago

Very trippy...

Something I would expect to hear at a "Gathering". I think that I would delete the second " Fun and pain, soulful refrain between each of the verses, but other than that... All good. Like it lots! ~ Geezer.
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M

Miserably Happy

5 years 3 months ago

Trippy

A satisfying adjective:) Thanks Geezer for the advice on repetition.