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The soldier. (My attempt at ENGLYN PENFYR)

March, we march because we must, oh we must.
We will never trust , you see?
Blind and numb, n'ere reaching thee.

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Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: North Carolina, USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Alfred Noyes, T. S. Eliot, Lewis Carroll, Samuel Taylor Coleridge, William Wordsworth, William Blake, Seamus Heaney, Robert Herrick

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judyanne

judyanne

12 years 8 months ago

not all englyns are quatrains

Englyn penfyr
Also known as the short-ended englyn. It consists of a verse of three lines.

The first line has ten syllables and the other two have seven each.

The seventh, eighth or ninth syllables of the first line introduces the rhyme and this is repeated on the last syllable of the other two lines.

The fourth syllable of the second line echoes the final syllable of the first through either rhyme or consonance

March, we march because we must, we must. (9)
 We never trust, you see? (6)
 Blind and numb, n'ere reaching thee.  (7)

 - we were going to stick to quatrains for this exercise –you have jumped the gun a couple of weeks to tercets. lol – never mind, great to see you showing us the stanza – you just need to fix the syllable count of the first two verses

– and I see you are remembering feet – nice meter

great little poem
love judy
xxx

 

 

judyanne

judyanne

12 years 7 months ago

One tiny problem

The fourth syllable of the second line should echo the final syllable of the first.

Your edit has made it the fifth

Otherwise great
Love judy
xxx

wesley snow

wesley snow

12 years 7 months ago

I had never heard of these Celtic poetry types,

so as always I did some research... and was very sorry I did. There seems to be enough information concerning these eight types of poetry to warrant a decade's worth of study.

Darn it.

I have to go to work.

I am going to have to rent some more space for my mind. I'm running out of room.
wesley