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RoseBlack
RoseBlack
Mar 13, 2023 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Solve et Coagula

Tranquility rising
Beneath Luna's magical light
Cross-legged on one's lonesomeness
Eyes closed entranced

Silent affirmations
Of a former self left behind
Imminent rebirth
Of a soul who's consciously aware

Free from chains
That bound needlessly
Free from wounds
That were deadly

The daystar rises
Gently stirring her
With the warmth of its breath
Suddenly, she awoke, redesigned

About This Poem

Last Few Words: “solve et coagula” is derived from “solve,” meaning to break down and separate, while “coagula” describes the process of bringing elements back together (coagulating) into a new, higher form.

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, Jim Morrison

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Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 years 3 months ago

dear Carrie,

thank you for explaining the title, it helped a lot and made it reader-friendly!these are my favorite lines:
Silent affirmations
Of a former self left behind
Imminent rebirth
Of a soul who's consciously aware

right now, I am writing a book about my life and those lines are what it is about. you have summed it up so beautifully!

*many hugs, Cat

RoseBlack

RoseBlack

2 years 3 months ago

Thanks Cat

I have made so many changes in my life in a short amount of time, I thought it was time to put it on paper so to speak. Glad you enjoyed. I am interested in reading your book when your done.

Candlewitch

Candlewitch

2 years 3 months ago

dear Carrie,

I will let you know when it is finished, and make sure you get a copy. I could be awhile at it, I am 72. it as been a very long life.

*hugs, Cat

RoseBlack

RoseBlack

2 years 3 months ago

Yes

But what a fascinating life you have led just from what I have seen you share. Can't wait.

Rosewood Apothecary

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 3 months ago

Great title

I think this works pretty well how it is.

Things that might be played with but maybe shouldn’t be played with

Cross-legged on one's lonesome(ness)
Eyes closed entranced

That one probably sounds cooler the way you have it if in fact “lonesome” is used as a noun.

With the warmth of its breath
Suddenly, she awoke (different)

That’s works great but there are specific words for this kind of “different”. What we have here is a metamorphosis. So she has been. Transmuted, transformed, transmogrified. Recast, redesigned, redefined, revised, refashioned, readjusted. Altered, modified.

That’s all I have. Super job!
Tim

RoseBlack

RoseBlack

2 years 3 months ago

Hi Tim

Thank you! I like your word choices! Now to decide which one to use because they are all great! I'm glad you enjoyed this!

Lavender

Lavender

2 years 3 months ago

Solve et Coagula

Hello, Carrie,
A beautiful title! I feel as if I am witnessing a transformation ritual - dramatic, yet very quiet. "The daystar rises..." Very elegant.
L

RoseBlack

RoseBlack

2 years 3 months ago

Thank you L

I was doing some research on spiritual alchemy and the phrase jumped out at me. After digging a little further into, it seemed like a perfect fit.