someone

Having spent 30 odd years thinking along those lines, you best pick up the phone and go for it, I wasted a lifetime in one way or another just doing what others thought I should do.
Lovely sad write, Yours Ian.T

but if you could think of replacing

inmost with innermost

and
journey with my branded word
sojourn
it may add flavour to the stone.
but you are free to LOL!
and let all be alone

I think the last two lines really make the poem! I wish you wouldn't change them.

always, Cat

I think the closing lines are working good with the rest of the poem unless you have something else in your mind.

PS. I wonder if the blank verse follow the same meter of the rhyming one. I see that some lines don't scan like iambic

did you mean 'imposters' or 'imposter's'? See the huge difference with enjambment? Don't know which one you meant.

I rather like the last two lines from my cynical perspective, but perhaps

and in my life's detachment I have leaned
That separation is illusions tool

or something like that.

Illusionist/s..someone something some muse directs fate
paths route/s separate separateness separated
the twin halves one...

love the idea opened here for thoughts on last lines..

Damned because I suck at them I guess. But if you're not happy with last 2 lines you could try :
and find at my trek's end we weren't apart
for seperation does not affect souls.........................................stan

There is a movie out there that Paul Newman bought
for his wife and he made the movie..
its called
"The effects of man in the moon marigolds and gamma
rays" It was filmed in Toronto Ontario Canada I think

He put her in lead and the movie is a cult classic

I pity the poor young poet who comes here and gets so many suggestions they suffer "baby with bathwater" syndrome. You, on the other hand, know what you want and choose what you need to make it better.
[thunderous applause from the archetypal consciousness that is Neopoet]