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May 09, 2017
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a son for grace
A son for grace after a long time in labor
The pains of labor will kill a man twice
The strength and endurance a woman has is
Divine
Mothers we love you
Grace your labor is not in vain
In rain and sunshine you toiled
In pains and sweet tears
Push-push its been you giving me pushing me out of troubles
Giving me life, protection and affection
A son for grace, 9 months the other ladies carried their babies
But decades have you carried me mama,
A son for you
I would be
The pains of labor are over now mama
The gain of labor is a son mama
A son for grace after years of labor
About This Poem
Last Few Words: this little piece of work is for my mum
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JAY GBUGASON
8 years 2 months ago
this piece of work is for my
this piece of work is for my poor mum