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Sonnet for a Northern Monkey
I woke to rain like pigeons scrapping in my bin,
the sort that wets your socks before you’re dressed.
Kettle clicks, the telly’s zoning in,
the toast goes black, it’s biscuits and we’re stressed.
The street’s half-lit, a wheely bin's been nicked,
some sod’s been tagging walls with “FUCK THE TORIES.”
Bus late, of course, and it smells of sick,
the driver grunts, swears, and sings his songs of glories.
A kid’s on loudspeaker, mouthing ‘bout his mum
her new bloke, a thief selling dodgy gear.
An old man lights a cig despite the “No,”
and nods at me like, yes, I am still here.
This town won’t shine, it’s chipped and full of scars,
but still, we walk it like we own the stars.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: The term Northern Monkey is a derogatory term in England but us Northerners wear it as a badge of honour. :)
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Michael Anthony
1 month 4 weeks ago
Excellent imagery here RL! I
Excellent imagery here RL! I felt like I was a passenger on the bus with you - good stuff!
Best
Ruby Lord
1 month 4 weeks ago
Hi Michael, thank you for
Hi Michael, thank you for reading and commenting. I was unsure if anyone outside of Manchester England would get this. To my shame, you proved you did. I shouldn't worry about our cultural differences. Ruby xx
Geezer
1 month 4 weeks ago
I was ready...
to get the umbrella out for my walk to the bus. Sounds like someone got up late. Maybe overstayed out last night? A bit of a hangover? ~ Geez.
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Ruby Lord
1 month 4 weeks ago
Hi Geezer, thank you for
Hi Geezer, thank you for reading and commenting. Ruby xx
Rula
1 month 4 weeks ago
Hello Ruby
Loved the title (honestly I had to google it up then I read your last few words):)
The first line explained everything after that. Some few spots where I lost the connection, but it's ok.
I especially like the closing couplets and the flow all through.
Well done indeed!
Ruby Lord
1 month 4 weeks ago
Hi Rula, thank you for
Hi Rula, thank you for reading and commenting. I was a little concerned as it is very English so I thought maybe not everyone would understand it or appreciate it? It's a humorous look at ourselves which is what we do the best. Your comments as always are appreciated. Take care, Ruby xx