Soraya M.

Can I pray
without uttering a word,
even to God?
Can my hands shake
can I
cover my head with enough ashes?
Could I clothe myself in burlap?
When I close my eyes to sleep,
if Jesus is my Savior,
and not the Savior of the world
what kind of man am I?

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Conect11

14 years 5 months ago

Thank you Ian

It is vital that we share that love without boundaries if we are to be truly human, and not mere animals.

Psyve

14 years 5 months ago

Conect11

I read into this the questions of faith and repentance/ penance that we ask ousrslves as good human beings.

Why would my God protect me and not my "enemy combatant" on the same battle field. He too may be a good man, perhaps a god fearing family man .. with different ideals, that's all.

What is enough atonement for my sins?

All well expressed in this little gem.

Thank you for sharing this very human question, so humanely.

Psyve