Soul Dancing

there are lingering
pages of you
I remember softly
morning
loving your eyes
looking through time
and back again
touching
that part of you
touching
me...
knowing
at that moment
in our time
what could never be
whole again
without you
lost in your gaze
unable
to look away
climbing after
mesmeric player
pipes the tune
spellbound soul
I follow
cresting...
keeping pace
with the woven magic
Rock teeth
bellow
cannot touch me
I am flighted!
I Believe

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: Northwestern Wisconsin USA, USA

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, William Blake, Bob Dylan, Tom Petty, Carlos Castaneda, Jim Morrison, the whole of Neopoet and many more.

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Comments

Kailashana2

14 years 1 month ago

I think it is a beautiful

I think it is a beautiful poem all the way through, Cat.

I know that double spacing occurs when transferring from Word, and that is the only quibble I have.

Candlewitch

14 years 1 month ago

Dear K.

Thank you. Yes, the double spacing on transfer is annoying.

always, Cat

raj

14 years 1 month ago

Dearest Cat

this poem is all the more beautiful because of its cascading effect ..it flows so beautifully....

much love...

Candlewitch

14 years 1 month ago

Dear raj,

Thank you for reading and commenting! It is always nice to see you.

always, Cat

Race_9togo

14 years 1 month ago

Yeah

I love this one Cat, its powerful and intimate and smooth as silk, except for the double spacing, and the quotes on the last line, which aren't needed, to me.
Really really good!