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Oct 04, 2011
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Sound Vision...
Sound vision…
I stared in stereo,
listened in colour
You were speaking,
that little smile was
playing at the extremities
of your lips.
I felt myself
content,
That long ago evening
we both knew…
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Her lips still fascinate as they curl..
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
weirdelf
13 years 9 months ago
it's called Synesthesia
when one sense is perceived as another. Alternative title?
haunting little piece, very effective.
oh, yes, her upper lip was almost prehensile and translucent, different woman I imagine [smiles wistfully]
Roscoe Lane
13 years 3 months ago
Thank you,
Thank you Jess, and forgive me as I have just came across this poem and your comments. Regards Roscoe...
scribbler
13 years 3 months ago
Hey Roscoe
One of the better short free verse I've read lately, but then again what does an old rhymer like me know about free verse? lol..........stan
Roscoe Lane
13 years 3 months ago
Thank you,
Thank you Stan, your comments are always welcomed. You may regard yourself as an old rhymer, but when i see how you help others here at neopoet, i would say you are a poet's poet. I think i know what i mean, lol. Regards Roscoe...
scribbler
13 years 3 months ago
lol
I see typos also plague You as poet's poot came out poet's poet lmao.............stan
judyanne
13 years 3 months ago
roscoe this is just so awesome
i have nothing more to say to you because i want to read it again...
.... it is just so... so ..
as i read it the world fogs for me too
- that total feeling of awareness focusing into a central point ....
.... oh roscoe will you please go away - i have nothing more to say - i want you to leave now so i can go back and read it over and over again....
lol - oh by the way, did i say?
i really like this
love judy.
Roscoe Lane
13 years 3 months ago
Thank you,
Thank you Judy, glad you enjoyed my little poem. lol. Love Roscoe...
loved
13 years 3 months ago
thank you
Roscoe
thank you