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Geremia
Geremia
Nov 28, 2011 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Southern Breezes--updated

SOUTHERN BREEZES

southern charm and southern comfort

southern breezes and southern spices

scorching days and sultry waves

of cotton dresses

satin sheets in perfumed nights

passion’s fire seething into daylight.

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Country/Region: USA

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wesley snow

wesley snow

13 years 7 months ago

Interesting imagery.

This is a style of poetry I have never been able to produce. The sort of "travelogue" poem of simply stated imagery of a locale or person. You do it well.
wesley

Geremia

Geremia

13 years 7 months ago

You can do just as well.

You can do just as well. Google the term EKPHRASIS IN POETRY--there's your answer.You have great command of language.

Thanks,

Joe

Geremia

Geremia

13 years 7 months ago

I am always sohappy to see y

I am always sohappy to see y,ou Ian. Been ckose to my end twice this past month but am managing qujte well now.

"southern comfort" is a play on words--it is also the name of a whiskey.

weirdelf

weirdelf

13 years 7 months ago

Powerfully evocative of a place and time I've never known,

that's good poetry.

This is going to sound niggly. but I want some 's' sounds in the last line. More in the way of assonance than alliteration. It would prosodically enhance the poem, I believe.
maybe something like
passion’s fire searing till sunlight.
or
sensuality bright sustained till sunlight.

Geremia

Geremia

13 years 7 months ago

Thank you. I remember the

Thank you. I remember the South in the Jacksonville of the 40's. {See BLACK WIDOW - true story]. I miss it.

Joe

K

Kailashana2

13 years 7 months ago

Nice collaboration Joe & Jess

Nice collaboration Joe & Jess.

South & North, interesting the divesting of principles, the South with it's facade of *gentility* and the North with its prevailing explosion of *myths*.

However, I like your poem, Joe. To hold someone in love, anywhere......

~Anna