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Sparrows
Why do the sparrows fly so high,
so near the sun,
so out of reach of limb
and rifle shot?
Why do they call,
but more,
why do I hear them call
when I cannot share
their merry song?
Why do they come
and go
like fleeting ghosts;
like happy little phantoms
dancing to a tune
that only God
and angels know?
That I do not know?
Why can no shaft
dethrone them from
their airy seat
into my empty arms?
When shall I be unbound
from this dreary rock,
to taste the fruitful air
on my dry tongue,
to beat my wings once more
against the wind
and dance the dance of sparrows?
About This Poem
Style/Type: Free verse
Review Request Direction:
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Comments
Seren
11 years 8 months ago
Sigh
I really enjoyed this poem there is so much to like, Have you heard the story of the Sparrows Song ? it really is quite beautiful this reminded me of that, I cant see anything major that needs changing a really solid piece that brought with it an air of mystery, well done.
regards Jayne-Chloe
William Saint George
11 years 8 months ago
Thanks!
I haven't head the Sparrows Song, but I'll check it out.