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Rhyme Crimes

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The Spectrum (rhyme crimes)

Opposite ends of the wheel
the distance far too great
you've lost your sense of feel
and for me it's way too late.

About This Poem

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

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Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

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scribbler

13 years ago

hi Richard

Good to see you use my favorite rhyme pattern (abab). Rhymes are exact. One of these days you'll write a lengthy poem and I'll die from shock (just kidding.......I think)...............stan

themoonman

themoonman

13 years ago

thanks Stan,

This was merely a quatrain with proper rhyme,
more could be added but wouldn't want to be guilty
of shocking you (lol)

judyanne

judyanne

13 years ago

great richard

so far .... lol
wesley wanted at least two verses, so you'd better add another before he gets here and gives you the hardest assignment :)
and anyway - this needs more elaboration imho
as you well know - this is perfect rhyme xx

love judy
xxx

wesley snow

wesley snow

13 years ago

Judy and I both have no fear of "The Long Poem",

so we both always want more. I think I said "one OR two quatrains", but I'm not wading through it all to find out .
At any rate, we wanted a demonstration that the poet understood the leader's definition of a "proper" rhyme and you do.
I like the poem despite what Judy and Jess feel. Sure it needs fleshing out- it's only one and I'm not asking for quality until the third poem (at which time I may lose some participants due the complexity I'll demand).
wesley