RoseBlack

Feb 16, 2023 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)

Spellbound

Nary a pin drop could be heard
As the sun stripped down her firey rays
Giving way to the moon's seductive glow
Body and heart open to show

Placing the athame upon the altar
Black petals falling against its wood surface
Sandalwood and saffron engulfed in fire
Floating with the wind to her desire

Speaking his name, she called above
Let these words find her love
And place him in her arms so tight
So mote it be

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Country/Region: United States

Favorite Poets: Edgar Allan Poe, Jim Morrison

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Comments

Seren

2 years 4 months ago

Dear Carrie

So Mote it Be.

This is an incantation to love and for love.

It's gorgeous, enchanting and I wouldn't change a word.

You can't change a spell once it's cast Eh? ;)

Love and biggest hugs so mote it be Jayne xox

RoseBlack

2 years 4 months ago

Thank you Jayne

Just a little spell for love...maybe someone is listening...glad you enjoyed

Rosewood Apothecary

2 years 4 months ago

Witchcraft

Excellent job weaving all the elements together. Obviously I’m into pagan beliefs and so this one is special.

Tim

RoseBlack

2 years 4 months ago

Hi Tim

Thank you for the read and comment...I still remember much of what I learned many years ago regarding paganism and am a strong believer. Glad you enjoyed.

Candlewitch

2 years 4 months ago

dear Carrie,

I must echo all that has been said! this is so very enchanting!

* brightest of blessings, Cat

RoseBlack

2 years 4 months ago

Thank you Cat

Glad you enjoyed! I am trying to dig deeper with my writing.

vandiemenspeak

2 years 4 months ago

Blimey.

Blimey.
"As the sun stripped down her firey rays"

Now that's a memorable line. I am a fan of WB Yeats more more esoteric works.
I do love the tone of this, yet find myself profoundly lost.
This ridiculous device, in the southern hemisphere finds me me, scrambling to devine that strange beauty you created. I will have to return.
Kindest regards
Chris.

RoseBlack

2 years 4 months ago

Hi Chris

Thank you for the read and comment. I am glad you enjoyed and look forward to your return and further assessment.

RoseBlack

2 years 4 months ago

Thank you

Glad you enjoyed! I am working on digging deep and expanding my vocabulary.