The Spider's Intricate Web

But, the way you have woven them together, like the spinning of a spider's web itself, they fit into place with each other quite profoundly! Very nice write!

I understand it is free verse but the stanzas establish a rhythm that is neither maintained nor expanded and the rhyme scheme feels out of place and incomplete.

Also, a number of the lines have a stilted grammar that feels as if it exists to hit a syllable count for no apparent reason.

Lastly, the title appears overly grandiose. Perhaps something like "INTRICACIES" to give it the subtext without giving away the entire image in the title.

There is some good imagery and I feel this could be a good piece with more attention to flow and language and either a more conclusive ending or a more comprehensive setup for the despair.

Thanks!
This is a little disjointed when read. I think that this is due to a simple lack of punctuation.

Wait, ME wanting punctuation! LOL I find myself doing that more often.

When spoken aloud, I find that this poem flows off the tongue very well, and lends itself wonderfully to recitiation. It has a powerful flow and cadence that I completely missed when reading it. Spoken aloud, this poem carries an emotive thrust of conflict, doubt and despair that is very strong.

I considered that you might want to re-arrange the lines a bit, to make them more reflective of how the poem is spoken, but I have to admit I enjoyed the revealing of the poem's concealed rythym as I spoke it aloud, so for me, I wouldn't change the structure.

I like the title too, it re-inforces the imagery in the body of the poem,

When I spoke this, only the last line threw me, and I think the minor stutter there at the end could be fixed very easily, by replacing "that echoes" with "echoing".

I like this very much Chrys, I'm glad you re-posted it.

Thanks again.