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The Spirit's Night

From open graves the spirits roam,
this one night of the year,
To wander up and down the streets,
and in our hearts strike fear.

They scratch upon the window pane,
and pound upon the door,
With wailing voices screaming out,
for entry they implore.

And peering out from back of drape,
the terror of the eve,
Seen scurrying across my lawn,
these spirits as they grieve.

Responding to their horrible cries,
the door I open wide,
And standing there amid their shrieks,
my terror try to hide.

I open up my mouth to speak,
"have mercy" I repeat,
And to my pleas they all respond,
in loud screams, "trick or treat."

About This Poem

Review Request Direction: How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Region, Country: NW Georgia (Fairmount) by way of South and North FLA, USA

Favorite Poets: Robert Frost, T. S. Eliot, William Carlos Williams, Carl Sandburg and Ezra Pound. I like these the best but really enjoy many many others like Whitman, Emerson, Whittier and Longfellow.

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captjack

12 years 10 months ago

Your read

Hi Lonnie,
Thank you very much for the read and your comments.

Gerry
(Captain Jack)

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captjack

12 years 10 months ago

The Spirit's Night

Hi Beau,
Thank you for the read and you comments. I'm going to look at your suggestion and see how I might make the line work some other way. Again thanks.

Gerry