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Sep 11, 2015 ⭐ View statistics (Premium feature)
This poem is part of the workshop:

Hiding emotions in metaphors

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FROM SPOCK"S VIEWPOINT (metaphor shop poem)

I see all the things called emotions
Which defy all logic to me
people nearly crying oceans
from "sadness" or being "angry".

Tell me how one such as I
can determine how they "feel"
for no matter how I try
I can't comprehend "woe" or" Weal".

Is anger just like being burned
or is it cold as glacial ice?
Is joy like a new theorem learned
and exactly what is "nice"?

About This Poem

Style/Type: Structured: Western

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

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China Blue

China Blue

9 years 9 months ago

Stan

this came close however
how would an alien know what crying is , or sadness etc but being Mr.Spock I let it go since he was half human
please comment on others that have workshop postings
so far myse;f and Wes

S

scribbler

9 years 9 months ago

Hi Chrys

An unexpected beach trip has gobbled up time in preparation last 24 hours and I'll be off line until Monday evening. I'll catch up then.........stan

Rula

Rula

9 years 9 months ago

hello Stan

I think the last stanza meets perfectly Chrys's requirements for the 1st assignmen.
Nicely done!!

S

scribbler

9 years 9 months ago

Hi Rula

Thank you. I might should have used a less known personification for an emotionless alien as Wes points out below lol. Perhaps a Borg would have been better.........stan

wesley snow

wesley snow

9 years 9 months ago

A Borg!!!

That would have been perfect. A wondering Borg on the verge of revolt without even knowing it as he begins to question human emotion.
What a brilliant idea.
Go ahead and write it. I want to read it.
Or maybe I'll steal it.

S

scribbler

9 years 9 months ago

lol

perhaps the Borg would be a good un. I'll see if I can throw something together tonight. But against this shop resistance may be futile........stan

S

scribbler

9 years 9 months ago

Picky, picky, picky lol.

I was kinds stuck. Use a near universally known figure or a lesser known (maybe Spock's father Serik or a Borg) as the protagonist. Perhaps I chose badly...........stan