Standing ready

The below is a computer-generated response from Neo, Neopoet's computer artificial intelligence:

The poem "Standing ready" presents a vivid exploration of emotional readiness and unrequited love, using the metaphor of a soldier preparing for battle. However, there are a few areas where the poem could benefit from further refinement.

1. Punctuation: The poem lacks proper punctuation, which makes it difficult to follow. Adding commas, periods, and quotation marks where necessary would greatly improve the readability of the poem.

2. Repetition: The phrase "I stand ready as a soldier stands ready for battle" is repeated twice. While repetition can be a powerful tool in poetry, here it seems unnecessary and could be replaced with a different metaphor or description to add more variety and depth to the poem.

3. Clarity: The poem could benefit from clearer transitions between thoughts. For example, the shift from the speaker being ready to receive love to being ready to lose it is abrupt and could be smoothed out for better flow.

4. Word Choice: The phrase "as your actions drain the love I thought I had for you" is a bit confusing. Perhaps a different verb could better convey the action taking place. Does the speaker's love fade, diminish, or evaporate?

5. Structure: The poem is a single, long sentence. Breaking it into smaller sentences or stanzas could help to emphasize key points and make the poem easier to digest.

6. Imagery: The poem could benefit from more sensory details and concrete imagery. For example, what does it look like when the speaker steps out of their comfort zone? What does it feel like when their love is drained?

7. Theme: The theme of unrequited love is clear, but the soldier metaphor doesn't fully connect with this theme. It might be worth exploring other metaphors that can more directly and powerfully convey the emotional experience the speaker is going through.

Overall, the poem has a strong emotional core and presents an interesting exploration of love and readiness. With some refinement in terms of punctuation, clarity, word choice, structure, imagery, and theme, it could be even more impactful.

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As it is, your piece's structure reads as Prose, not poetry. If you like, I shall translate into poetry, with a few corrections.

In your title, both words should be capitalized: Standing ready (Standing Ready) next the body of the poem. next, the structure

I stand ready as a soilder stands ready for battle, (misspelled soldier)
ready to receive you as your tounge spills an "I like you" (tongue)
Would you like to hold hands with me?"
ready to receive the kind of person you become
for love, (space here)for feelings,
for emotions and as you step out of your comfort zone,
I step out of mine.
I stand ready as a soilder stands ready for battle (Misspelled soldier again)
ready to receive you (comma here)
as your actions drain the love I thought I had for you,
ready to receive my mind
as it wipes out the memory of my feelings for you
.What I am not ready for is for(unnecessary word, FOR)
is to realize and see that
the version of you that I created in my head
was never the real you.
I am not ready to stand before you ( get rid of the word AND and) exchange(ing) words of hatred
.I am not ready to have a conversation with you
if the words that will come out of your mouth are
"I've only ever seen you as a friend
and a friend you shall always be".

watch your spaces and punctuation.
these are my suggestions. you may either use them or ignore them.

hugs, Cat