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Dec 05, 2014
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(Stan's WS) (Atteration of Frost's Good Hours) (2nd Attempt)
I had not for this winter evening walk
my just passed friend with whom to talk.
But I had the cottages in a row
up to their shining eyes in snow.
And I thought I had the memories within, 2
Alike the sound of a violin. 1
I had a glimpse through curtain laces
of youthful forms and youthful faces.
I had such company outward bound.
I went till there were no cottages found.
I turned and repented, but coming back
I saw a shadow, but couldn't track. 3
Over the snow my creaking feet
haunted the oblivion in village street 2
the nightmares of your leave 1
at ten o'clock on a winter eve.
About This Poem
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
scribbler
10 years 6 months ago
much better
In stanza 3 back and spark don't rhyme though. I'm sure you can fix that easily enough.........stan
Rula
10 years 6 months ago
hello Stan
Edited. I believe track works better.