A Star's Name

I look at the sky
starless in its ebony light
searching for the one
known by the name
written in my soul.

I see you
out there all alone
and I call your name
the sound traveling
through time and space
reaching its intended
goal

Then like a breeze
Sailing upon
a moonlit ocean
whispering,
paint me a picture
with your brush
of words

Star of my dark sky’s
bathe me in your light
it is your name I call
on my lonely nights
reveal to me
the brightness
which shines within

You are the daylight
which I have longed for
giving me life
so that I may live
in companionship
with you
for ever more

About This Poem

Style/Type: Free verse

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Not actively editing

About the Author

Region, Country: New York City, N.Y. Spanish Harlem, USA

Favorite Poets: P. Neruda, Jose de Diego, E. Dickenson, R. Frost, there are many more, but these had the greatest influence...

Comments

Candlewitch

14 years 1 month ago

Oh, Eddie!

This is so lovely! If this doesn't bring a tear of happiness to her eyes, nothing will. I wish my guy wrote poetry. But at least he shows me in a million little ways that he cares. Favorite lines:

Star of my darken sky’s
bathe me in your light
it is your name I call
on my lonely nights
reveal to me
the brightness
which shines within

(but I think "darken" should be, either dark or darkened)

keep on writing. Your inner beauty shines through every line.

always, Cat

Eduardo Cruz

14 years 1 month ago

Cat

I thank you, love has turned me into a bowl of jello. Hahaha
She loves jello!

I made the change your eagle eye spied.
again, thanks

Eddie

loved

14 years 1 month ago

I read it too

But Cat's verdict
silences me
you see
i have become
a narcisistic ,
i thought the
STAR was me ..

Eduardo Cruz

14 years 1 month ago

loved

you are a star, but in a different constellation. I do see you shinning bright.

Eddie

loved

14 years 1 month ago

as long as i am a star

let me remain
lest some day i become the moon
cool
or sun
and burn

Eduardo Cruz

14 years 1 month ago

a universe

isn't it what we all do
in the end
burn
one way or another.
we are all stars
until we super nova
and just like that
poof
we're gone

Eduardo Cruz

14 years 1 month ago

Funny, but that's how I read it to her in a whisper. She said it felt like a prayer. I being the romantic that I am. I said, but your are my Goddess!
Chrys not ole, a young romantic. at lease it's how I feel, Hahaha

Thanks for the read and the lovely comment
Eddie
......

"If romance is the blood of life. I truly need to donate some, for I am filled with it"