Startled

Awakened, startled late at night
by a strange and sudden sound.
An airplane crash? A chainsaw roaring?
Full wakefulness disspells all fright
for it's only Susan snoring.

— scribbler, Mar 08, 2016

About This Poem

Last Few Words: For some reason my better half sees little humor in this one lol.......

Style/Type: Structured: Eastern

Review Request Intensity: Please use care (this is a sensitive subject for me, do not critique harshly)

Editing Stage: Rough draft

About the Author

Region, Country: South Carolina, United States, USA

Favorite Poets: Frost, Burns, Longfellow, Poe, and Johnson. I guess you've noticed these are all past masters. Other than folks on site I don't read any contemporary poets .

Critiques

Sparrow

10 years 3 months ago

Stan

Now you are in trouble, and not even a poetic theme just a protest of amnesic proportions lol,
You may have to go and have your body mended several times before forgiveness is given.
Another of our poets taken to their bed, but I guess your bed will be in the Dog house lol,
Take care both and try to enjoy , Makes me smile as I wend my way to another snore zone,
Yours as always Ian
ROTFLMAO---!!!

scribbler

10 years 3 months ago

lol

It has actually become comforting to wake up at night and hear her sawing logs . Of course there Are times when she bulldozes them lmao........stan

lovedly

10 years 3 months ago

save ur skin

Stan
she may saw it by her loud snoring

I am the ONLY record holder on snores
no one can challenge me
at times my snores too
awaken me
can you hear me snoring !

scribbler

10 years 3 months ago

I

No NOT snore regardless what Susan might claim. The mirror cracked on its own and the dishes rattled off the shelves for a Unknown reason lmsao...........stan

Sparrow

10 years 3 months ago

Stan

Now we know why the Atlantic Ocean has so many waves especially when the Americas are asleep..
La La

Seren

10 years 3 months ago

Has she slapped you yet lmfao

Has she slapped you yet lmfao !!

beautifully funny poem for your loves snoring !!

enjoyed it and its a nice high note to go to bed on

love always Sis xxx

scribbler

10 years 3 months ago

Not yet

But there Are occasional "I'm asleep and "accidentally" kicked you episodes lol. Still can't understand why she doesn't see the humor in this scribble........stan

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