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Apr 03, 2018
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State mend:
Past hegemony
spawned Present acrimony
Future synchrony
About This Poem
Last Few Words: Unilateral rampage leading to collateral damage rescued by multilateral clearage
Style/Type: Structured: Eastern
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Pugilist
7 years 3 months ago
Disjointed
The puzzle of structure is to fit meaning within the constraints for your target audience.
If your target audience is yourself, well and good. If it is a particular subset of the populace, fine, let us know that filter. If it is the world at large, this is not successful.
OriginalRhyku
7 years 3 months ago
Moore's law
Mr. Moore, my Rhykus are in the mind of the reviewer. Every reviewer deduces what they want to and sometimes it is better that way than trying to explain my context. Thanks for your review and I appreciate your taking the time to review my Rhyku. I must say that you have failed to annoy me and in fact I agree with your review.