Triskelion

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Stay

Stay.
No one waits for you
Out in that cold night
Where blindness reigns.
Stay.
Tomorrow we can wake together
On a bed of elation,
Recounting this white night's
Magic

About This Poem

Last Few Words: Just throwing this out there for the sake of it. Any feedback is appreciated.

Review Request Direction: What did you think of my title?
How does this theme appeal to you?

Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back

Editing Stage: Editing - draft

About the Author

Country/Region: Lake Simcoe Canada

Favorite Poets: Poe, Frost, E.B. Browning, Theodor Seuss Geisel,

Comments

Candlewitch

1 year 7 months ago

hello,

Respite from the cold night and loneliness. Taking refuge where you find it, with someone who smooths your rough edges. That is my take on your poem. Very nice!

*Happy Holidays, Cat

Triskelion

1 year 6 months ago

Thank you, Cat..

...I was just remembering some nights when I was young, how a snowstorm brought a certain comfort of being stranded with someone I wanted to get closer to. All the best to you and yours!

Thomas

RoseBlack

1 year 7 months ago

Short and sweet

I can hear my own thoughts echoed in your words....all I want is for someone to stay...well done.

Triskelion

1 year 6 months ago

Sometimes..

..unexpected weather activity can be a blessing. Cheers RoseBlack and holiday greetings!

Thomas

Obadiah Grey

1 year 7 months ago

Well ok I'll stay but,,,,,

Well ok I'll stay but,,,,,
Pull my vest down when you're done,Thomas.

I like these "shorts", usually written off the cuff so to speak, they either work or don't,
I particularly like the latter half of this, though, enjoyed the whole.

Obi.

Triskelion

1 year 6 months ago

Hehehehe...

..only if I'm blackout drunk.. It's funny how a simple idea can write itself out in moments. Not much in the way of snow yet in my neighbourhood, but maybe I'll look for you next storm.
Cheers Obi!

Thomas

Lavender

1 year 7 months ago

Stay

Hello, Thomas,
Pure romance...
L

Triskelion

1 year 6 months ago

That is..

..a sweet, simple reply that says it all. All the best to you and yours this holiday season. Thank you, Lavender.

Thomas