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Mar 13, 2011
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STEALING GLIMPSES
Stealing glimpses
into another's soul
Shutters are drawn
nothing is manifold
But from each crack
a light creeps through
revealing so much pain
it's best not to peep,
or attempt to view...
Bj
13 March '11
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Licia Daniels
14 years 4 months ago
Good one
The strongest of masks can be cracked if we'd care enough to look. Best not look too intently. Pain is contagious.
Smooth and polished write.
Diana
Race_9togo
14 years 4 months ago
Hi BJ,
I haven't seen you in a while, I hope everything's good with you.
While I'm not sure that I agree with your sentiment here - how else does one ease another's pain, but to accept and understand it - I cannot fault your poetry. Meter and word-use are nearly impeccable, and you make your point smoothly and succinctly, with power.
I want more too, please!
Most excellent.
magics02
14 years 4 months ago
Hi Boni
I read this and then I read it again and then I read it a third time and was about to let it go and said no.. let me tell her
I had a problem in the syllable count maybe in this part or something did not jive with me right here. I shall revisit if I can think of something on it more tomorrow ..it is just my take..
stealing glimpses
into another's soul
Shutters are drawn
nothing is manifold (this line ..something about this line.. I believe the word I am stumped on is probably the word manifold and soul... in the ryhme)
just my wee stumblee, the rest of it was good. Food for thought..
Mona
xox
Bonitaj
14 years 4 months ago
Thanks everyone!
This was just a slip of a poem to comment on the insights of a psychologist's daily life! moi!
Cheers