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Jan 24, 2023
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Strangers
a lion must roar
to remember he can
so necessary his anger
to the ends of man
like poetry in league with its pain
i hear god in the walls with the termites
i see grief who forgot why she came
i feel you in moments and forgive myself
when i remember you're not here
so as i sit folding the papers
that one day they'll burn
i plant the parts of you
that moved me most
in the minds of many and
make the smiles of strangers
remind me of you
About This Poem
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - draft
Comments
Jackweb
2 years 5 months ago
Very interesting piece!
My favorite lines:
i plant the parts of you
that moved me most
in the minds of many and
make the smiles of strangers
remind me of you
Nice, with smooth flow of language.
.
Triskelion
2 years 5 months ago
I'm biting my tongue here
...but I would never have expected something so primary from you. It will be interesting to see how this transforms into the free verse I would expect from you.
Cheers.
Thomas
Rosewood Apothecary
2 years 5 months ago
If I had to pick one line
“I see grief who forgot why she came”
That is one outstanding line of poetry
Tim
Candlewitch
2 years 5 months ago
dear IO,
I agree with JackWeb on his choice of favorite lines. it is good to see you posting more :)
*hugs, Cat