The Stranger's INSIDE (eddy styx) * reworked

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The poem "The Stranger Inside" by eddy styx utilizes a first-person perspective to explore internal conflict and the darker aspects of the self. The poem's structure is consistent, with a simple rhyme scheme that contributes to its readability.

The poem could benefit from a more varied vocabulary and more complex sentence structure. The use of common phrases such as "nowhere to run" and "up against the wall" can make the poem feel somewhat predictable. Experimenting with less common phrases and more descriptive language could enhance the poem's impact.

The poem's theme of internal conflict is clear, but the nature of this conflict could be further developed. The speaker mentions "rage," "sorrow and pain," "anger from shame," and "uncontrollable wrath," but these emotions are not fully explored. Providing more context or detail about these emotions could make the poem more engaging and relatable.

The introduction of the "stranger inside" is intriguing, but the poem could delve deeper into this character. The speaker warns others to avoid this character, but it's unclear why this character is so dangerous. Exploring this character's motivations, actions, or effects on the speaker could add depth to the poem.

Lastly, the poem's ending could be strengthened. The final line, "he will eat you alive!" is dramatic, but it feels somewhat abrupt. Developing a more nuanced or unexpected ending could make the poem more memorable.

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I like the title, I think that putting an apostrophe in it would be cool; like the Stranger's INSIDE, right now! LoL

Anyway, you made this sound up close and personal.
The short choppy lines, give this an urgency, a desperate message.
You might try to smooth out a couple of places, but I can't be sure of how you sounded out those lines; you might have been running or all out of breath for any number of reasons. ~ Geez.
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You know I don't often comment on pieces but I felt compelled to. This sets off at a good pace (I would have liked better punctuation but you know that's me) and then suddenly it seemed to hit a patch of ice and shot off out of control. I've read it through several times now and it's fine up until " I've tried to defy". then for a few lines it seems to slip along then from " I urge the meek" it's back on track. As Geez says you may like to smooth it out a bit and I think those 5 lines should do it. Alex

I wonder id it works better for this one to be divided to stanzas.
If this was mine I would start with

Backed into a corner
up against the wall.
I've a feeling I'm done for
this time I will fall.

Nowhere to run
nowhere to hide,
might as well face
Plz. don't ask why, but that's how I got it ordered in my mind. Just my thoughts.

Keep them coming.
Thank you for sharing dear friend.
the stranger inside.

I believe it flows much better.
Good job dear!

I still think it needs firing up. I do not generally approve of re writing others work so I'll make a suggestion. Third verse.
Fury I feel
At her finding of me;
Abnormal situations
Talk of Psychiatry.

I feel that if you could tighten up the remainder, get rid of many words, it would pack the punch it deserves.
Hope you don't mind my suggestions, Alex.