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The Study
Amidst the chaotic scenery
I had lost my muse
How horrible
For a poet to have no words to share
Indeed I felt lost
So during the nights I dreamed
Peculiar things I saw in my dreams
But none worthy to be spoken as poetry
Just dreams
But then I began to hear a voice
A voice of a woman mumbling
Mumbling things to herself
Practicing a conversation by herself
Day by day I would hear her voice through the walls
Talking to herself
I would make out some words now and then
Especially when I was working at my desk
She would keep talking to herself
And I would keep trying to find my muse
I saw this woman one day
The one whom I would hear through the walls
She was finely dressed
I began to pass by her every day
And as always she was finely dressed
Always going somewhere
With an anxious look on her face
I would keep hearing her voice through the walls
But it was different now
She was not talking to herself
She was just talking
Again and Again I would pass by her on my way out
And she was always finely dressed
Perhaps she had a lover
Maybe that was why
The reason she would practice conversing
The reason she was finely dressed
Again and Again I would hear her voice through the walls
But why did I hear her voice through the walls?
Then one day it stopped
I could no longer hear her voice through the walls
I didn’t see her as I made my way out
And one day as I was making my way out
I stopped by her door
And heard a soft breathing
She was behind the door
I walked away
And finished the day
And that night as I sat at my desk
I could write once more
For my muse had found me
Yet she was trapped behind that door
Perhaps she had a lover no more
Or maybe she could speak no more
Could it be that my muse had found its place
And would leave me no more?
About This Poem
Last Few Words: When you make inspiration your prisoner it will want to leave and will likely succeed. Until you find it once more.
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
What did you think of the rhythm or pattern or pacing?
How does this theme appeal to you?
How was the beginning/ending of the poem?
Review Request Intensity: I appreciate moderate constructive criticism
Editing Stage: Editing - polished draft
Comments
Ian.T
12 years 10 months ago
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A piece that is more of a story than poetry, but there are a few repeated things that can be taken out and the whole thing shortened to appeal to most poets..
The typo line
But it was different know (NOW) should be there.
I enjoyed reading the story and the whole theme was balanced, look forward to more of your writing now that your Muse has returned,
Yours Ian.T