A Study In Pink SECTION 13

Give me something to play off of....so now I can address Fitz Roy and the dead body that isn't him.

Well you wanted to be a detective and find us killers now you have a very good chance, I shall see if Creel is going to be a bit more cooperative later,
We have two knives, a missing wife, a man/woman quite capable of being a bitch with extra strength, then a
mis-identified body, well there maybe a lead in the hotel, there in a room not searched as yet is a decaying head that will solve a problem and the body of a woman floating in the canal just a short way from here with nasty knife wounds.
Come on wake up there is work to do that Hotel owner must know what has happened ????
Good write but not enough fire, Yours John Creel

Your writing in spite of enduring flu and other niggles is testimony of your commitment to the workshop. Your attempt is good to keep the ball rolling. A few friendly suggestions for your review:-

Guy French felt as if they were being watched.
He feigned a [ bout of cough]
as he stole a glance at the window.
He caught sight of the man in the shadows[shadow]
and ran out of the bar shouting.
The panicked man started running
while Guy French gave chase
Stop that man!" he cried out but none come [came] to his aid.

Well done, now just Stan to go then I shall have to see what I can do lol, hope you recover soon, my best thoughts to you and your family.
Yours Ian.T

Somebody catch him and find out why he ran.

tell me when you're ready for this to be moved. Thanks for hanging in there with us. I don't feel so hot myself. Don't be afraid to take some time for this.
This goes for everyone. The Main Thread is there so we might read the whole work and move forward in a reasonable way.
Take some time. Don't be in a hurry. Too many plot threads unresolved makes for bad drama. Start resolving some of these threads. We need to start thinking about a climax. Not yet, but work toward something cataclysmic.
Somebody book that poor shmuck Mackwill. He's guilty as hell even though "he" didn't do it himself.

hence the moniker "experimental". Everyone knows I did not expect the workshop to "succeed", but I and others wanted to see what would happen if we tried it.
Now we really need to try to bring some of this together. Not introduce more elements, but tie the elements present into a whole that leads to a climax of sorts. Hopefully someone else will die and we need more Mog as this is a horror story.
Alid I applaud your efforts thus far. You have experienced in this shop and the previous one just how difficult it is to tell a tale whether poetic or not. You have done marvelously and I wish you felt better. I feel lousy, but I don't think as bad as you or Barbara.

Although this WS is active, I appreciate your thoughtfulness and proactive approach by having the earlier WS as a precursor which has been instrumental for necessary preparedness of the participants to enthusiastically participate in this WS. I am sure with your frequent intervention and prompting it would be a success. That's my take for now.

Regards,

You are more than kind. I wish you had joined it, but your comments have been invaluable.

a mystery is a mystery and there can be so many ''ifs and buts and nos''' we ALL are not confusing but thinking multi directionally ...as so many minds apply simultaneously
and its not unidirectional
else one could have composed one in a manner that one can alone imagine
mystery is utter confusion many stories have still been left in the open
w/o any solution

read some in newspapers
mystery is a flowing river
which can have no single leader
you are welcome to replace anyone...
I wll relinquish my seat for you
when ever..
just join the fun