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Mar 05, 2012
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Subjectivity
"The beauty of subjectivity
Is everybody gains.
It makes the bars of captivity
Decorated window panes.
About This Poem
Last Few Words: I had a program recently with a group of writers. It was called "Writer's Block Unlocked." I tried to write a poem in response to a poem prompt. I failed. This is all I could come up with.
Review Request Direction:
How was my language use?
How does this theme appeal to you?
Review Request Intensity: I want the raw truth, feel free to knock me on my back
Editing Stage: Editing - rough draft
Comments
Geezer
13 years 4 months ago
I would love...
to see this expanded upon. It stands well on the few lines that you have written, but you could do well to think about how those decorated window panes might affect someone looking at or through them. ~ Gee
William Saint George
13 years 3 months ago
That will be saved for a much
That will be saved for a much more thorough piece. I'v found that appending to my older poems leaves me with an incomplete feeling. Will look at it. Thanks.
Eduardo Cruz
13 years 4 months ago
Perfect!!
I fuck'en love this, how simple and thought provoking. Damnnnn!
Eddie
William Saint George
13 years 3 months ago
Thanks Eddie. U're very
Thanks Eddie. U're very welcome. Didn't have much time to reply earlier.
Short poems work well for me, especially when they neatly bottle up everything that's to be said. :D
wesley snow
13 years 4 months ago
I'm with Eddie.
This is curious as is. wesley
William Saint George
13 years 3 months ago
Thanks Wes!
Thanks Wes!